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I got out of my casket
headed back to the funeral home.
Dropped off my suit and shoes
drained myself of the embalming fluid.

Headed back to the hood
that's where I seen my homies,
It turned out to be
they were just phony homies.
 
I cant believe what I am seeing.
My best friends laughing at me.
I died for my homeis,
turned out 
they were phony.
 
Now that I'm back in da hood
they don't even know me.
They act like they don't see me,
one even told me.

I wouldn't wanna be you!!!

I died for my homies,
but it turned out to be
they were just phony homies.

I wish I knew from the start,
I wish someone had told me.
If I could do it again
I wouldn't been rollin

around the hood,
wit all those phony homies.

But its too late
I'm dead
Shot in the head
By my friend!

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I love the beginning. It caught me , and make me want to read more. I want to read more of your work. I would expand more on the part where you headed back yo the hoos. What were they doing, saying ect.Explain more why you see they are phony. The phony part need to be expanded, because that is you tag, and title.
Good job!
Thanks for the feedback. I will go back in it and see if I could add more detail to it and see if it works. My goal was to stay true to what I was feeling when I wrote the poem. It's actually a three part poem. So far I have only published part one, which is what is published here and on my site. Something happens to his so called buddies who are laughing at his untimely senseless tragic death, each one of them. I do think part one could use a little more detail, I just never went in to do it after I wrote it. I do thank you for your honesty. Hope you have a great day and be blessed! You can also find more of my work at:

www.poetrypoem.com/blackbanditpoems

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